Jack's house

We have been learning how to get more points for our writing by using hooks, metaphors and similes.

I wrote about going to my friend's house.

1:going to Jack’s horse

2:rugby game

3:great battle

“Yipee!”  I yelled as I dashed out of my bed and raced to my mother's room. Blink, blink went her eyes as we rushed to the car. My mum jumped into the car and we drove to Jack’s house. He has one big house as big as godzilla. It’s gigantic! I zoomed right into Jack’s house. He showed me around the house and his Lego.His pile of Lego was bigger than Mount Ruapehu I wish I had as much as him. When I was done with his lego I had a look at his ocean of toys.

Brrmmm.The car was warming up, ready to go to rugby. I dashed as fast as  flash straight into the car. Jack was trying to catch up but he was a slow sloth. When he got in the car we drove like lighting to the rugby game after the rugby game we had some food.

Have you ever been so exhausted you thought you would die? The rugby game was tough.  Jack’s mum came to pick as up. She is sweet honey.

When we got back to Jack’s home we had a nerf war. I had a sword and a shield and Jack had a bow. “321 begin!!!” I shouted. I sped to Jack’s side and tried to slice him in half. He shot 7 arrows at me. I blocked 4 like a ninja fighting an assassin. The last 3 I sliced in half like I was a knight. I rushed up and uppercut him which meant I beat him. That was a great day.

Writing using similes and metaphors.

We have been learning how to use similes and metaphors to get a better score for language in our writing. Here is my 'moment in time' recount.

“Good morning, Happy birthday!” we all shouted as we marched into my little brother’s room and pulled him out of his cot and took him to the living room. Ding dong!  I ran like lightning and opened the door. My little brother crawled to the door. There were so many people that came for my brother’s birthday. It was too many people for our home. My mum shouted to my dad, “Can you pass the toys?”  but he was a slow sloth. Then we set up the bouncy castle. Bounce, bounce bounce! I loved it.  

This week we have been learning our multiplication division and fractions facts on a piece of paper we did it 4 days a week Here are my scores for the week Monday 27, Tuesday 33, Wednesday 33, Thursday 41.