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Saturday, 20 May 2017

Writing using similes and metaphors.

We have been learning how to use similes and metaphors to get a better score for language in our writing. Here is my 'moment in time' recount.


“Good morning, Happy birthday!” we all shouted as we marched into my little brother’s room and pulled him out of his cot and took him to the living room. Ding dong!  I ran like lightning and opened the door. My little brother crawled to the door. There were so many people that came for my brother’s birthday. It was too many people for our home. My mum shouted to my dad, “Can you pass the toys?”  but he was a slow sloth. Then we set up the bouncy castle. Bounce, bounce bounce! I loved it.  

1 comment:

  1. Great job on the simile and metaphor, Tae. What a happy day you had.

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