Learning Journey

Wednesday, 30 August 2017

Writing using our five senses.

This week we have been learning how to describe places better by using our five senses. We had to write using at least 3 senses. I hope you enjoy my little story about this photo. Abandoned Hospital


The wooden door creaks open. The smell of dead bodies makes me shiver. Blood drips from the ceiling onto my head. The floor is spiky and hard beneath my bare feet. My legs trip over as I run into spider webs that get caught in my eyes. I yell, "Helpppp! " There is a dead body next to me on the floor. The door slam shut behind me ,the wind blows me back and the walls start closing in on me.

By Tae Campbell

9 comments:

  1. OMG HI TAE THIS IS LIKE TOTTALY MIA AND I TOTTALY LIKE MISS YOU AND THANKS FOR THE COMMENT AND WE ARE GONNA BE BFFS FOREVER also i love your writing. :3

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  2. hi tae you wouldn't proplblee now who my teacher is its your mum ok bye i liked your post to

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  3. Hi Tae your mum is my teacher and I like your story. Keep up the good work

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  4. HI TAE YOU ARE AMAZING OH YEA THIS IS ANGEL FROM KAWAKAWA SCHOOL # im angel#your awsome# hey

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  5. Kia ora Tae,

    Aue! That sure is a spooky picture you've painted there with your descriptive words and your use of the senses. What will happen next?

    Miss M

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  7. Tae your mum is my teacher and I like your story. Keep up the good work

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